1) Agent Kai - This is a story about a secret agent tasked to save a fellow agent from their archenemies.
2) The Businessman - a story about a rich businessman, his lover, and their children.
3) The Fisherman - This is a story about a young fisherman who finds love in an unexpected way.
4) Oh The Irony! - This is a story about innocent students framed for something they did not do.
5) Just Deserts - a story about a mobster and his lying cousin.
6) The Fall of the Dark Lord - a story about a noble king and his battle with a fierce enemy.
Tyler, this was so good! I really enjoyed reading it. It was very easy to read, imagine, and follow along. Your story of the agent Kai was not only super interesting and engaging - it was also very educational. Because you've written in such a parallel to the Ramayana, it helped make it easier for me to understand more about the part of the story that you are referring to in this certain story, and I'm sure that this story will give that same informational appeal to the other readers throughout this semester. My one piece of constructive feedback is very minor, considering I enjoyed your story so much. I would maybe be a little more descriptive in the appearances of the agent and his partner as well as the opponents that he faces - just to make it even easier to visualize. Regardless, I really enjoyed it, and honestly, I can't think of any other constructive feedback to give! Great writing.
ReplyDeleteHey Tyler! Your story about Agent Kai was an interesting read! I enjoy reading stories that have a bit of action and undercover-like stories. Your title caught my attention in that aspect. It reminds me of the mixture between the movie "Spy" with Melissa McCarthy and "Kingsman" with a little bit of "James Bond." In that it has some slight humor, a main character with a lot of skill and a tad seriousness.
ReplyDeleteI was hoping to learn more behind why Rita was wanted out of all the agents that could've been taken. I understand that you were matching the original story, of which I don't know much about, and you explained well in your author's note why you chose the way you did your story. It would've also been nice to have a background in their love story, because it seemed quite abrupt at the end when he expected her to marry him. Also, the repetition in the way he quoted "it is blatantly obvious' could've possibly been done differently. Although I can understand that that could've been his thing and just what he has a tendency to say. Aside from that, maybe a bit more action could've added to the suspense. I would've liked to see what more could've happened in the fight between Kai and Vana.
Overall I enjoyed the story and action that you did provide! You did a great job in the creativity as well! Can't wait to see more if your work!